Many people like to take photos because taking pictures is an interesting thing. The camera can record life and take of many pictures about scenery, art, life and so on. When you traveled, you could record everything that happened on your traveling by camera. You can take pictures anywhere in life. Taking pictures can increase a lot of amusements in our life so camera is really a good invention.
The saying goes: The camera never lies. Nevertheless, Computer had been developed a lot nowadays. Photos sometimes lies. Although these photos were pretty, it was unreal and artificial. However, many celebrities’ pictures were very beautiful in magazines. In fact, these pictures may be altered. In my opinion, it was not good behavior because many people confused true with false in these pictures.
In sum, the cameras are a good thing. It has many functions such as taking a picture. Taking pictures is really interesting. However, modifying photos is a bad thing.
Hi Grace,
回覆刪除You did a good job here. The clear orgnization of this journal help your reader (that is -- me) to follow your thinking easily. I could hence get your idea with ease.
The ideas put down here were quite nice, too.
Still, I happened to see some mistakes here, and I would like you to revise them.
1. Many people like to take photos because taking pictures is the interesting thing.
改掉the，用an
2. The camera can record life and take many pictures about scenery, art, life and so on.
這個take pictures 是加of
3. When you traveled, you could record everything that happened on your traveling by camera.
這裡不能用過去式
4. so camera is really a good invention.
照相機是可數名詞，處理一下
5. Photo sometimes lies.
Good point! 但photo是可數名詞，處理一下
6. Although these photos were pretty, it was unreal and artificial.
代名詞用錯
7. On the other hand, many celebrities’ pictures were very beautiful in magazines.
這裡的linking words 'on the other hand'用錯，請找別的