It’s very important for people to travel in the world. Nowadays, more and more people enjoy taking a trip aboard. Traveling is a good thing. It can make friends with foreigners from different countries, broaden yours knowledge and expand what you could see and make you acquaint with various cultures etc…
There are two ways you can choose to travel, such as backpacking travel and tour travel trip. Backpacking travel means people take a trip by themselves. It’s very free because time is up to you. But you have to arrange the journey by yourself. Tour travel trip is that people take a trip with guide. If you lazed to arrange the journey by yourself, you can choose tour travel trip. They can plan the journey so you just enjoy the trip and relax yourself. The drawback is that you can’t go anywhere if you want to stay.
Finally, if you want to see a lot of scenic spots, you can choose tour travel trip. If you tent to take a deep trip, you can choose backpacking travel. The most important of all, you should be safe when you take a trip.
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